Creative Criticism

After some creative criticism and positive help, we have slightly altered the story arc.

In the beginning,only the large bird will be in the scene, and the smaller bird will walk into the scene. He will look to see the fire (which is unseen)  He then begins poking the large bird repeatedly.

The sun and moon is no longer in the film to represent time going faster.

New Ending 

Massive fire, smoke explosion

smoke fades

branch is gone

camera pans down to the ground

2 piles of ash with little eyeballs blinking


2 naked birds with a few feathers flying.


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